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paraka ([personal profile] paraka) wrote 2008-07-21 04:26 pm (UTC)

although with my roommate raving on and on and on about how *good* of a writer she is...
And that's what really boggles my mind about all this. The story line is basically a romance novel without sex (and hey, you can even find romance novels these days with vampires and werewolves) but written horribly.
*looks over the emails I sent to [livejournal.com profile] paradise_city* Here are some examples of her style that stood out to me:
-At one point she describes the small living room as "handkerchief sized"
-She describes the names Edward, Alice, Emmett, etc. as "grandparent-type names".\
-She calls snowballs "mushballs"
-From my email: "I wish the author would stop listing all the stupid random things that Bella does. It really drove me crazy that week when Edward was away from school, because it was all "Bella went to school, noticed Edward wasn't there, and blamed herself. Then she went home, made dinner and scolded
herself for being so self centred to think she was the reason Edward wasn't there. The next morning Bella headed to school. In biology Edward still wasn't there. Bella barely made it through gym without dying during dodgeball. Then Bella headed home, then Bella, then Bella, then Bella, OMG SHUT UP!"
-"Traitor tears were there betraying me"
-"Her heart spluttered"
-"Liquid topaz eyes"
-"His marble eyebrow puckered"

Yeah. *cringes*

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