Is it bad that I was able to quote what the Star Wars clips were supposed to be saying? Is there some reason why you've got those all tacked on the end or was that an accident?

Anyway, the real vid: I noticed this the first time I watched the last version and then it went away on second viewing, but I noticed it again on this version, after the scene with John leaving the jumper when you cut to John and Weir running, it feels like a very abrupt cut. Almost like the fade bit lasts longer than normal.

Other than that, everything else is looking good. It doesn't look like you had a chance to add very much more, so it's just that one place where I'm gonna nitpick.